A Declaration by the Elected Representatives of the newly-formed United States of America.

I would lose one of the "natures" in the first paragraph.

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Declaration of Independence
Here is the complete text of the Declaration of Independence.

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The original spelling and capitalization have been retained.

(Adopted by Congress on July 4, 1776)

The Unanimous Declaration
of the Thirteen United States of America

☆☆☆-Kristine Spanier 3/11/08 7:55 PM When people need to dissolve the political bonds which have connected them with other people, and when they need to assume the separate and equal station which the laws of nature and of nature's God entitle them, they need to respect each others' opinions enough that they should declare why they want to separate. -Klasley 3/7/08 10:05 PM

I would lose one of the two natures in the first paragraph.

"We hold these truths to be self-evident,get a clue! that ALL people are created equal, regardless of race, age jd 3.8.08, gender, or religion". All People are endowed

with certain unalienable rights , including a cheerful, peppy life, liberty and the pursuit of happiness . That to secure these rights, or really good things, governments are instituted among nations, deriving their just powers from the consent of the governed (or, in some less fortunate cases, through fear of those in power). Whenever any form of government becomes destructive to these ends, it is the right of the people to alter or to abolish it, and to institute new government, laying its foundation on such principles and organizing its and everyones powers in such form, as to provide for their safety and well-being.

Prudence (who's she?) will dictate (you and what army??) that governments long established should not be changed for light and transient causes, only for heavy and stable ones. Experience has shown that grapes (grapes?) are more disposed to suffer, while evils are sufferable, than to right themselves by abolishing the forms to which they are accustomed. But when a long train why do those long trains appear when one is in a hurry? E.B.3/8/08 of abuses juxtaposed with usurpations another excellent "big word" - Janelle 3/13/08, pursuing invariably the same object evinces a design to reduce them under absolute despotism, it is their right, it is their duty, to throw off such government, and to provide new guards for their future security. NO TAXATION WITHOUT REPRESENTATION! OR ELSE! Such has been the patient suffering of these territories under the immediate political control of a state; and such is now the necessity which constrains them to alter their former systems of government. The history of the United States is a history of repeated injuries and usurpations, all having in direct object the establishment of an absolute tyranny over these states. To prove this, let facts be submitted to a candid world by means of Candid Camera or YouTube. or anyone else's home video. Doesn't anyone send videos to Funniest Home Videos anymore? Ah, the good old days. - Janelle 3/1/08